Re: request for correspondence -
Posted by:
K_A_Opperman (IP Logged)
Date: 3 August, 2011 01:38PM
Thanks Mikeabo123! But those poems you read are grossly amateurish compared to the poems I'm writing these days--not trying to sound arrogant, it's just true! (I'm more belittling my old poems than praising my new ones). The only three poems I currently have published were written long ago, when I was still trying to find my voice. They relied on assonant rhymes, and uneven meters. Now I'm far more strict about such things. I used to let slide such rhymes as, say, "see" and "agreed"--but no longer. None of the greats would let that slide--CAS sure wouldn't (99% of the time...I think I've seen a poem of his that solely uses assonant rhymes)--so why should I? Besides, writing within more strict confines makes the challenge greater, and therefore increases the fun of writing poetry!
The problem is, I haven't gotten around to sending out my better stuff yet--which numbers about 10 or so solid works written within the last 6 months. Several of them I recently "retrofitted" to meet my nascent higher standards...a rather difficult task!
I see no harm in posting the first two stanzas of the poem I'm currently writing. CAS is among my foremost poetic influences...you will see what I mean by 'stricter standards' in rhyme and meter.
Hallowe'en (excerpt of draft)
by K. A. Opperman
Carved pumpkins glow from porches dark
With lurid goblin grins:
Each flickerlingly brands its mark
In haunted air, silent anarch
Of bale that soon begins...
Of weird diablerie that reigns 'til ring morning matins...
Leaves sweep and scatter as they flee
A coming nameless dread:
They flit through lantern witchery,
Skip oe'r the dark, tree-shadowed lea
Where no one dares to tread,
For fear of devils in the fog, and being pixy-led.
Now, bear in mind that this is the rough version! I cannot post the whole thing because A, it is unfinished, and B, it would compromise my ability to have it published. Well, it's a passable representation of my current style and ability.