Re: NYCTALOPS set to music
Posted by:
calonlan (IP Logged)
Date: 6 August, 2010 09:01AM
First, I can tell you absolutely, Clark would have loved it! I like it on the whole, couple of small performance points - the word "dew" - Clark did not pronounce it as "dooo", but the more proper "dyoo";
and the word "sidereal" - I would suggest a stronger accent on the second syllable, and a blending or running together of the last two, rather than equally emphasizing all three syllables - for me, that would be more effective and in keeping with the mood.
Minor points - I really appreciate your effort - and I can assure, there is no one who may call himself a purist who knows more about Clark's understanding of sound as a source of meaning, than myself, and in second place would be Don Fryer, whose own poetic sensitivities closely follow those of Clark. For a true poet, "how" the poem means, is as important as the "what", if not more so, because that is what makes it poetry - rhythm and sound - Clark loved the sound of Anglo-Saxon, Old English, and their natural successors such as Gerard Manley Hopkins and Dylan Thomas - liquid power!
Great job - keep it up
(ps: advise the young man to take a few voice lessons so as not to lose his voice while young)